If you liked the last story, I can tell others. I’m not sure how I got that one from the prompt “magical realism,” but I guess I had a sea story in me just waiting to emerge.
Let me know what you think because I am honestly curious:
Should I try for another story next week?
- Absolutely, I like reading stuff like this (43%, 3 Votes)
- Could you at least try to come up with something more plausible than a cthuloid lobster-kraken? (29%, 2 Votes)
- No, it wasn't really worth my time (14%, 1 Votes)
- I'll read it if you post it, but don't feel obligated on my behalf (14%, 1 Votes)
- Only if you actually try to make it funny this time (0%, 0 Votes)
- Why don't you stick to things you're good at (0%, 0 Votes)
- Do these polls even matter? You're going to do what you feel like anyway (0%, 0 Votes)
Total Voters: 7
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Hey Coriolinus,
I liked how this story started out, but felt it light-sped to the end. I realize the point, and the irony is humorous, but the delivery was not as humorous. I do want to read another. Also, your votes had one positive and the rest were negative; where is the middle ground?
Thank you for criticizing honestly. I’d agree with both those points; they’re things I’ll have to work on for the next one.
For the votes, I just put the answers that I expect people might vote for. It’s not very precise, but it gives people a fast way to leave feedback. For more nuanced opinions, we have the comments.
Well, I thought it was humorous. You led up to the punch line well, and it was a clever idea. I’m definitely up for more. You did forget to complete the last sentence in paragraph fifteen, though: “…explore a potentially dangerous…”
Thanks for pointing that out! It’s fixed now.
I didn’t get the humor, but that probably has more to do with me than with your writing style :P . I did think it was good writing, and I, too, would like to see another story from you. Some unwarranted advice: don’t worry too much about the characterization or descriptions; if you just write the way you did, within your own self-defined limits, I think you’ll do fine.